by BeautifulDisaster Dec 8, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
The love she feels |
Damn, i thought i loved two people once but stayed with the 'safe' one and found out that it was the right thing to do :D |
by Vanessa
Sad but intresting, it didn't go in the direction I thought it was going. another well written poem you have here. The emtion was deep, but the word chice could have bben a little better. Excellent job 5/5 |
Awww amazing poem...im in this situation right now with 2 guys and i have anorexia so wow this poem really hit home for me |
by ellewen
It is like you arent even writing a poem at all. You are just looking forsomeone to rant to or something. Sure writing it out is a good way, but you really need to make a rhythm or make it rhyme or something. They call it poetry for a reason. And your stanza's are too short. When stanzas are organized they typically have a rhyme scheme or there is a particular reason they are organized they way they are. If you organize them with two lines, make every other line rhyme or something. Im really not trying to be mean. I jist have to be honest, jist as I expect others to be with me. |
Aww.. this is sad.. nice job though.. the emotion came out great in the poem |