That was real sad but very well done. I felt the pain the girl in this poem felt. I found this deep. Great job! Keep it up! =)

Ok its sad. but not relaly realistic. she starves herself for a week, and nowis dying? i mean. i htink the structure could use more. the story line i mean. it could use more depth, explain more aobut the relationships and such.

overall a pretty good poem wiht potential.

x4Lauren

Wow! The emotion surrounding that! Poor girl,. You make the reader feel like they are right in your poem. Good job!

Hey ive been in his situation before its a lways a hard one good write and hope you make the right choice if this is true keep up the good word and always be happy =]

Aww.. this is sad.. nice job though.. the emotion came out great in the poem

It is like you arent even writing a poem at all. You are just looking forsomeone to rant to or something. Sure writing it out is a good way, but you really need to make a rhythm or make it rhyme or something. They call it poetry for a reason. And your stanza's are too short. When stanzas are organized they typically have a rhyme scheme or there is a particular reason they are organized they way they are. If you organize them with two lines, make every other line rhyme or something. Im really not trying to be mean. I jist have to be honest, jist as I expect others to be with me.

Awww amazing poem...im in this situation right now with 2 guys and i have anorexia so wow this poem really hit home for me

amazing poem your writing is beautiful and so full of emotion

keep up the great work
brittany(MD)

Sad but intresting, it didn't go in the direction I thought it was going. another well written poem you have here. The emtion was deep, but the word chice could have bben a little better. Excellent job 5/5

Damn, i thought i loved two people once but stayed with the 'safe' one and found out that it was the right thing to do :D

xxx alex xxx (3)