I nearly

by David   Dec 8, 2006


I nearly saw you
I nearly held your hand
I nearly touched you
And lead you along the sand

I nearly saw you
I nearly broke your heart
I feel like such a bastard
For trying to tear you apart

I nearly killed you
By my actions and my words
So please take the lies I gave you
And throw them to the birds

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  • 15 years ago

    by LivinFree

    I LOVE THIS POEM & I DONT THINK YOU SHOULD CHANGE ANY THING ABOUT IT BECAUSE IT'S ORIGINAL & BEAUTIFUL

    **Jesi*

  • 18 years ago

    by emmerz

    Short and sweet. well, not really sweet, but it was good! the only suggestion is that the first line of the first two stanzas are the same...dont know if its just me, but it might sound better if you chaged the second one
    something like this:

    I nearly DECEIVED YOU
    I nearly broke your heart
    I feel like such a bastard
    For trying to tear you apart

    or something, i know that wasnt very good, but you get the point, right?
    otherwise, good as always 5/5