The Loner

by Katie Bug :)   Dec 8, 2006


I sit here in the winds of December,
Trying only to remember
A life I had long ago,
When I was in a house, not cardboard, when it snowed.

I can remember when it ended,
No not literally, but when I befriended
A man by the name of Charles, you see.
He loved my wife nearly as much as me.

Dinner was a common deal
A jolly good friend, is how I'd feel.
He never wronged me in any way
But my wife constantly wanted him to stay.

Love grew within his soul
Three years and growing old
Time to act upon his desires
Feelings burning like open fires

The events that went on behind closed doors,
Were not on my property, not on my floors.
She would leave and meet with him
And I soon caught on, just from a whim.

Suddenly her interests changed
She felt no guilt, felt no shame
It was scary how easily she lied through her teeth.
Her soul and emotions I could no longer reach.

I knew the culprit that was at hand.
My old friend Charles, no longer a man.
No dignity and pride he shall ever hold.
If I was to know the truth that be told.

Anger dwells within my being
I cannot believe what I'm currently seeing.
Her and him in a luscious affair,
Their blood, each other soon shall wear.

The anger grows and lies within,
I pull out the gun and begin to grin.
No one shall ever do me wrong.
The lies and deceit will soon be gone.

The trigger is pulled and the fire shot.
The love of my life, now forgot.
My life I've ended before its time
No one will catch me for this remarkable crime.

To the woods I soon retreat.
To live and suffer my glorious defeat.
My life is slowly crumbling down.
To my body, my anger slowly drown'd

I now result to live alone
For an action I once made at home.
A life I ended all too early.
Solumness, now, keeps me from all worry.

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  • 17 years ago

    by DMG

    The concept of the poem is good as is the story it tells. Just be careful grammatically and watch for parallel tense construction and correct use of vocabulary. Those are my main two critiques. Good effort though. Keep writing and develop your talent further.

  • 17 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    I can't begin to imagine what inspired you to write this, but it's very good. The imagery seemed just a teensy bit awkward due to all the full stops that you sometimes did and sometimes didn't put at the end of lines, but it developed a style all of its own.

    //T.L.//

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    Wow,i think it's awesome,keep writing 5/5