This is pretty good ashley, great flow and structure, i give it a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

Hey good poem and i read your coments and i wasted to tall you thank you ill prally talk to u throught this thing ...the comments thing so ya but i im 14 today im so happy december 14th :) well ill keep reading your stuff i will try to post more stuff soon i have mostly quotes right now but thanks

~anna~

This was good but I found your rhymes were a little awkward. For example, the last one feels like you just used that line because it rhymed. It does not acutally make that much sense in context. Also, I think you should correct your spelling errors or slang terms such as "ya". Another thing I think would improve it is trying not to use words such as "he, she, it, they" and try to use more complex vocabulary. For example, there are so many other ways you could say "seeing". Keep up the good work hun 4/5

Ive had relationships where the parents get in the way, for some reason they dont get that ur partner is supposed to make you happy not them....Im from NW indiana

Short...but good!! I love all of your poems anyways!! =D 5/5

~Shae

OH MY GOSH!! i love it, i have the same thing going on!! good job :D