by *Charisma* Dec 9, 2006
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
(not what you think....read on!) |
Lovely! And oh so true darling! You brought an idea that could've been said simply and made it into am lovely poem with a lot of details! I loved it! |
by Midnight Sun
Yes, that is much better. Great job! |
by Gem
There's a few words that could be changed around to polish it off but it still works the way it is. |
by Midnight Sun
Ummm, I think the rhyme scheme was a little off. It was kinda here there and everywhere. But the message was really good. And with everyone that you described I could really picture them in my mind. So you did do a great job. And now you're at 160 poems! Congrats!!! |
I have to say that when I began reading the poem, I was a little shocked at what you were writing. However, as I read on, I fell into your words and truly envisioned my own life and the labels that have been put on me and that I have put on others. |