Hey girlie

i read your comment on my poem, about u wanting to write like me. let me tell you how flattering and apperciative i amof a comment like that.

about this poem, well your msg about frustration has definately come through. i thought your flow was very bumpy and rough however that actually suits the feeling your poem is letting off. the message is strong.
some constructive crit would be that you should try to balance out the lengths of your senetences better so that the poem seems more rounded and together.
hope taht wasnt too harsh =]
have a good one.