by fearose Dec 9, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
Malice rises in the air with the tribal smoke from the ash-laden fire. I smell the thick soot, dread collecting in my throat, scorching it with sorrow. |
Wow...amazingly beautiful.... your use of words is incredible.... i love how you can paint such a picture in the mind and how you can make someone almost feel your heart break ...5/5 without a doubt |
Excellent! The title grabs your attention and the overall poem is amazing! |
by Liz
I just love your poems now!! =] And I really liked this one, a lot!! The ending was great!! I don't really have much else to say about this...lol. take care! |
This is a good poem, great flow and structure, i give this poem a 5/5!!! keep it up!!! |