Great work Suz, I havent read anything from you in a while and this was a pleasure to read.
I love the last stanza especially.

Matt

Wow, that's a really good poem. I hope it's about war, cuz that's how I saw it, and it's really well said and in a rather more positive and honorous tone. Outstanding.

This poem flowed so well and was packed with meaning, excellent write 5/5 for sure

Wow this one was amazing I love the flow and the words you use on this one, yeah this one was full of meaning
and true... 1005 totally great

I really like this poem. It had a very nice flow to it, it just rolled off my tongue. Your word usage in this was incredible and the poem in general seems very well thought out. I especially liked the last stanza for some reason. It was a great way to end this. Definitely a good read! :) 5/5

I really like this poem. Why are yours always better than mine??? lol, oh well, i spose if ur better than me at everything then i can;t fight it. My favourite part of this poem is the first stanza, I just like the vibe it sets up for the rest of the poem. Great work Suz. xoxoxox

Perfect.

Again, I loved the flow to this one. The last stanza was sort of off with it, but it still worked well.

The rhymes you used were terrific yet again, and didn't seem cliche at all.

The whole idea of this poem was both depressing and a great read. It really reminds me of war and how life is like today compared to what it was like even 15 years ago. Wel done. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

The poem flowed really well and left me wanting more. I liked that every phrase seemed carefully thought of and so every small bit had such meaning. I especially like the phrase: 'beat for defeat'. Wow. xxx

"March to the music
Of death and deceit
With A tune to bring tears
And a beat for defeat"

Fabulous opening! Althought i think the capital A was unintentional? I could be wrong =)
Once again, your rhythm is amazing, it really helps the reader to locate the beat in the words
Well done
5/5
*Gem*