by Lollypop Dec 10, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
If you could take my hand, |
by livingwith
Bleeding demons, made a good point. I have found out, that sometimes i can inspire my self with poems i've writen. Sometimes we find something amazing just by taking a second look. Like one poem can open a door to emotions, while the next is us walking through. |
I feel this poem is unfinished u may want to take it back out revise legnthen it up a little n then repost it might help it has a good flow but the ending is abrupt wich makes a point but no visualisations n thats a good key of poetry is visualisations |