My Hollow Palace

by Midnight Sun   Dec 10, 2006


In this hollow place
My pen in hand
I write in the dark
I take a stand

I come to this "palace"
Just to get away
If it was possible
Here I'd forever stay

It brings me comfort
When I feel grief
Taking one breath here
Fills me with relief

Many see it empty
Only hollow halls
Instead of being captured
They stumble and fall

They see rubble and dirt
They see weeds not vines
But I do not care
For this place is mine

I fear the day it falls
For this is my home
But never in my mind will it
For I remember each stone

This place is my inspiration
It's my strength and my might
It warms my deepest parts
On winter's coldest nights

So maybe you too
Could one for you create
For it can be your haven
And help you escape

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  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    This was really good. Very descriptive, and detailed. Amazing imagery. & I , as well, agree with what Dave said. It is funny. And everyone should have a place like this.. Lol, even though. I don't! But, bleh.

    I didn't quite get the very last line:

    And it could one for you create

    ^^ IDK! maybe i'm just blonde.. but I didn't understand it. or what it meant. Lol. sorry, but i loved everything else!

    Amazing job. Keep it up, Hun.

    Bri.x

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    I agree with Dave ^^ Very profound!

    "In this hollow place
    My pen in hand
    I write in the dark
    I take a stand"

    I loved your opening to this one. It immediantly set the scene and tone for what the rest of the poem would be.
    Nicely done =)
    5/5 as always
    *Gem*

    (And yeah, the bleh was me saying i didn't like it, i think i could have done better, i may edit it in the future when my mood cheers up, lol)

  • 17 years ago

    by Ill Give Blood To Your Dried Veins

    Great poem. I really liked this. Very deep.

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