Advise It

Alright, i commented on this poem a while ago, and i don't know what i was smoking but i said it wasn't your best and it didn't roll off my tongue... now i just read it again and i loved it! i think i was distracted b4 or something, who knows, now grantid you've had better, but this was still amazing!!! jeesh i need to revise my thinking a bit!

Fixed, thank you

Onetime I will send you my heart,

That you are not only one in this land.

^^ Before "only" you need the word "the"

Before it dies, advise it good.

^^ It should be "well" not "good"

This time I will send you my heart,
Before it dies, advise it good.
Just convince it with some words,
This time, please do not be rude.

^^ "Good" && "Rude" do not rhyme.

This was nice but I felt it needed a little more detail in it, like more imagery. Maybe use better vocabulary aswell. This was nice but I still felt it was kind of bland. Nice job though hun 4/5

Awww. I love this poem.
It's sweet and beautiful.
Keep it up!
God Bless 5/5

~*Tay*~

Very cute! and unique, but unique is good
keep it up