Wow. this poem is so strong. you're very good about writing out your feelings and allowing other people to feel how you feel. 5/5

Interesting.. I think of instead of saying so many I's you can put things like:

Bowing my head in shame, for the way I try to control you,
I don't let you live, but you deserve to,
Holding you back from everything,
I am sorry I have let you down.

Staying awake long into the night,
Trying to find the error in MY ways,
Wanting to know what drove you to this,
Because I know it's my fault somehow.

It just makes it flow better... But other than that, Steph, it was beautiful. I can feel your emotion.. I favor rhyming but you impressed me without it. Amazing Job babe...

5/5

Thanks Brittney, I like you way alot better, so i changed a few things :)

It is always okay to cry. Just don't dwell on the past and keep moving forward. An old love is never something you should allow to suck you in. Learn from your mistakes and take the lessons in hand. I loved this poem. I'm a firm believer that poetry is not something made from the simple rhyming of words. Keep it up, and hold your head high.