Letting Go

by Lix   Dec 12, 2006


Her eyes are empty, like her soul
The tears are flowing out of control
Abandoned in a room, cold with despair
Hands keep shaking. Suffocating in air

Time goes by, though standing still
Down her spine runs a cold empty chill
Cheeks are red, burning like a flame
Desperately in search of someone to blame

The fault is hers and hers alone
Her soul has suddenly turned to stone
Everyone around has turned away
She has to let go, nothing left to say

Picking up the gun, aiming to kill
Aiming for his heart, feeling empty still
Instead she turned the weapon to her own
She was destined to die alone

At last it's over. Thoughts stop to flow
No more lies. It's time to go
Her body still aching as she hit the ground
She is now lost. Never again to be found...

(I know it's not one of the best, but I think it's pretty good 4 my first poem ever!)

LIX

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  • 18 years ago

    by alen

    Argh, i must correct my self: i meant that it has some depth, but it could be improved... Sorry, i had a millon things on my mind...

  • 18 years ago

    by Silent Screams

    That was awsome for your first poem, i think you did it rather well :) 5/5 keep on writting..i'll try and keep reading
    auna

  • 18 years ago

    by Midnight suicide

    Hey. i thought it was very good, and for ur first poem it was great. You'll get better and better. so keep writing

  • 18 years ago

    by Serenia

    Wow, i thought that your poem was rather well.

  • 18 years ago

    by alen

    Not bad. Not bad at all. You may lack some fluidity, but all in all, I think you did a great job. Especially for your first poem... It is not that deep, though, yet ejoyable still. Very enjoyable. 4/5