U hav sum good ideas u just need to work on ways 2 express them. try writing the ideas down in note form b4 writing hte porm (wat i shud b doin) cheers!

That was excellent! i really liked your words!

This is a nice simple poem< Coming from an Egyptian grl lol. Shout out. Nice poem. Do you really feel that way? Express your true feelings...put more emotion into it...and i'll be back on your page for more poetry Inshallah.