Watching You

by Midnight Sun   Dec 12, 2006


As a little girl
Upon the stairs I sat
My head through the spindles
Watching him build this and that

He always provided for us
With all that we needed
He would work and work
Until he finally succeeded

I always found comfort
Just knowing you knew
That for you I had respect
And I loved watching you

I soon hit my teen years
And I must admit they grew harder
But I never lost my love for you
And my respect grew ever stronger

And when you turned your back
To work on a project
I still observed your work
As you'd always expect

I always found comfort
Just knowing you knew
That for you I had respect
And I loved watching you

Over the years I've grown
And as I did so did you
Now I see you laying there
As I feed you your stew

This hospital sure isn't home
And I wish I could help you more
But I can't do anything for you
Except treat you like before

I always found comfort
Just knowing you knew
That for you I had respect
And I loved watching you

(I wrote this for a contest, but I would still love to hear your thoughts on it. I'm very open to suggestion, or if you just want to comment I love that too! Thanks! : )

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  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Wow. This was really amazing. It had a lot of detail & emotion in it. Very good imagery, as well. It was sad. yet, so beautiful. Because it shows how much love this girl had for him.. So it made me smile, yet i was sad.. lol. Confusing? Sorry.

    A couple things, though:

    He always provided for us
    With all the we needed [ I think 'the' should be 'that']

    But I never lost my love for you
    And my respect grew ever stronger [& I think 'ever' should be 'even']

    xD. Beautifully penned. Keep it up.

    Bri.x

  • 17 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Wow great poem for a 1 yr old:P thnx for the comment. i loved this poem..it was really good. the detailing was amazing..as well as the emotion keep up the great work. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    You know what, this poem was so sad yet it made me smile as well because the way i read it, it showed the unconditional love this little girl had, whether he was busy or not.
    It was beautiful in a way.
    I'm probably not explaining myself very well..
    I also loved the repetition you used, it really got the point across.
    i wish i could vote higher =)
    5/5
    *Gem*

    (And thankyou for all the lovely comments, i always feel prievledged to receive one from someone of so much talent. x)

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