It has to be the greatest thing i've ever read.

Nice...no my brother did not steal...

Wow! Thats really good. Its full of pain though. I hope you wrie just for fun and nit actually thinking bout this. But very good poem

That a nice !!!!!!! take it from me

I enjoyed this poem alot. It was very depressing yet nice.

Please read my poems

I like this too.. how so sad.. ur good into writing things like this but dont make too much of this... nice one.. keep up the good work.. its one of the greatest poem i have read... and it reminds me of someone...

Amazing poem

Amazing.. Did it really get u sent to the looney bin? Keep up the great work

Wow.. i feel your pain. your work is great. i hope you dont do anything stupid. the flow of the poem seemed kinda of forced, but im still going to give you a 5/5

I loved the begining of this peice. This poison dripping down your throat. Such a vivid image is created. It seems so slow. The poems pace acctually slows down for me at the begining of the poem. Now the rhymes worked, and the flow was ok. This poison well i can kinda see it as a metaphor. Your metaphorically discribing this as well as the usual litteral way. Its a way of commiting a suicide, yet its also metaphorically a way that just emphasies on the pain your going throuh. Brilliant begining i must say. I felt the poem kinda feel from the third stanza though. It does turn cliche, and you didnt have this uniqueness you had in the previous poem i commented on or the begining of this one. The emotion again is really clear in this poem. Emotion is your persoanl advantage at writing. Try using punctuation next time. Keep writing though! x

Very good, but shocking, one would hope its entirely made up...

That was really good and your end message made me laugh.. i've had reactions like that lol

Great job. The rhyme worked well. 5/5 no doubt!!

Omg so deep and lots of feelings to

This is a brilliant poem the word flow easly together it had so much emotion and feeling just one thing half way through the poem it says pleases do not cry for me it should just be please but overall a fantastic poem

well done

Really deep.
And really good.
5/5