Very good poem. I hope that more people will read this poem and take it to heart before they make the same mistakes. Keep up the good work. 5/5

Drugs ruin so many lives, and most of the time people can't give them up, i'm glad you've let them go and moved on with life. excellent job 5/5

This is really good, however you had a few spelling mistakes and missed out punctuation now and again where it was necessary. Overall though - good job. I liked it.

It's really choppy at the beginning but I really like the last stanza. It's so true and adds an impact to the rest of the poem. 4/5

Woah.. that's deep. reminds me of people. great poem. and yeah you can't spell for you life. lol..

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I had big hopes and such big dreams.
But the drugs took that away from me.
It’s all my fault. I have no one to blame.
The drugs became important, it’s all game.

I have woken up; I walk in the light.
Ten years clean, everyday is a fight.
I see the young that used to be me,
Partying and drinking, all their stupidity!

I use to be there, thinking it was fun.
Till I got hurt, because of something dumb.

I had pushed all my good friends away.
I still regret that, to this very day.
I didn't realize what I had done.
I traded them, for drugged ones.

I met a man, who was very lonely,
This man reached out, very gently.
He treated me like I was his daughter
Helped me get clean; better than my father.

Nothing I give, can settle this debt.
I can only remember him; I still do yet.
I help others, like he helped me.
This man has a place, in my history.

I am not here to preach to you,
I’m here to help get you through.
I am just here to share wisdom,
If you need help I’ll help anyone.

So, sit and stand away from the brink,
Think about that next pill or last drink.
Think, when you are behind that wheel,
About whose dreams you’re about to steal.

I hoped this helped! This is all pretty much all of your words, I just stretched them out and settled them in. I added some more rhymes than you had. Only about 4 lines aren't in your original. You don't have to add them. Like I said, YOU DID ALL OF THIS, all I did was give it a little push towards some longer lines and some little rhymes. You have a beautiful poem.

Excellent

5/5

I re-read my comment and the things that are like:

Iâll the â are ' (apostrophes)

Again Great Poem!

Poetry is a good outlet for emotions past and present, keep writing.

I just checked my inbox there and noticed the email which you sent on the 13th. Sorry for my late reply.

Second stanza:

"Its all my fault.
I have no one
But myself to blame.
The drugs became
All that was important,
All that I use to be."

The first line should read, "It's all my fault." and the last line should read, "All that I used to be."

"But every day its a good fight."

The 'its' should be "it's" - note the apostrophe.

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Hope this helps you out a bit.

I like the message you are putting across in this and it is clearly written from the heart. It started out very strong and although the flow and rhythm remained steady for me it seemed to lose something towards the middle - maybe it could be split into two poems?
Otherwise it is an honest and open piece that deserves credit for the subject.

I really liked that poem. It was written with such deep emotions and the ending I just loved. It was short but straight to the point. Congratulations to 10 years sober. Very nice write.

5/5

I liked this poem very much. i can relate to this in many ways.. it was perfect!