All i can say is that it's short and sweet! keep up the good work!

Simplistic in essence, and true at heart. You have the core a poet craves. Knowledge will make you great.

Seems like you're giving examples, but they're mundane; maybe express more detail about the feeling , aymosphere.. bring a reader in there.. but the diction helped out the nice rhythm..

Awesome! i like it how it was nice and short but sweet! great work i really liked it

Aww I love it!

Colby again this is really good
your an amazing poet and i hope you and this girl will be together

*sighs* i wish i could write happy poems. oh well. Depression is so much more fun. =] anyway. Good job on this poem. very short, very sweet, and so great. Keep writing. You're good

Emily