Confessions Of A Broken Heart (Trois-Par-Huit)

by Bryan   Dec 13, 2006


She brightens,
like the neon moonlight lightens.
Just one smile can tear my soul apart,

Like my lonely confessions of a broken heart,
It leaves my heart the only to depart.

I found that as much as I try,
I cannot even cry,
so I die.

a poem containing three stanzas of 3, 3
and 2 lines OR 3, 2 and 3 lines: 8 lines total with a syllable count of 3, 6, 9, 12, 12, 9, 6, 3.
The rhyming pattern is AAB BBC CC where the last line summarizes
the meaning of the poem. *Note: These poems are to appear center aligned

Bryan Hunt © 2006

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ironic Allure

    In the beginning, this poem is beautifully written and i really thought it was going somewhere. However, after the fourth line, it seemed to come across as a lot more forced. Whether that's because you were trying to abide by a particular writing structure, i don't know. It just felt like your attention was concentrated on achieveing a rhyme and/or syllable count, which unfortunately overpowered the poem's intent.
    i'm not the biggest fan, but i admire your attempt at writing differently, i really do. usually when people find a niche, they stick to it. this was very brave of you, so well done for that. x

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this.
    The structure was interesting, although it threw me a little in the middle.
    Apart from that, a wonderful job.

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