I Try

by Brittany C   Dec 13, 2006


The clouds pass me by;
Like people do daily,
I am lost and lonely,
Like a stray little puppy.
It all makes me want to cry,
Like a little baby.

I run hard like a race horse.
But I don't get anywhere fast.
Sometimes I feel,
as slow as a snail.
So time flies by,
on the wings of a bird,
And slowly leaves me behind.

I try so hard like a wild animal,
tries to survive in the wilderness.
But in the end,
I am like a lone wolf.
I try to survive the best I can.

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  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Eh.
    Not your best, but I liked the idea.
    You really try.
    But, I didn't really feel any emotion emitting from it, nor did I like the flow.
    Sorry.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    This is my favorite one so far. i love haow you compare yourself to animals in this. wonderfully well written 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Good job onthis, there's nice imagery! but the flow was a little off and i was a little confused about the rhyming... some of it rhymed and some off it didn't, i don't know if that was an accident or not, but im just pointing it out...

    4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Teria

    "I run hard like a race horse.
    But I don't get anywhere fast.
    Sometimes I feel,
    as slow as a snail.
    So time flies by,
    on the wings of a bird,
    And slowly leaves me behind."
    ^ That stanza made the entire poem the best poem I've ever read. I LOVED IT.

    keep it up.
    i've only done twenty, i will finish the rest tomorrow. I need sleep, i'm leaving tomorrow night for a trip. but, i'll get the other 16 done before i leave. promise.

  • 17 years ago

    by ruth

    Always wanted to tell you that your work is really unique!!! keep writing i am looking foward to it!!!

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