I like this poem a lot. i like how you used animales to describe how you feel and how you can relate to them. great job! 5/5

~Kristina

I dunno why somebody rated this poem so low, but I agree that sometimes no matter how hard we try, we never get ahead in life. I thought it was amazing nice job 5/5

This was a really good poem, and I liked how you compared difference actions using animal behaviour. Very nicely done.

Nicely written!

I liked it....it was great to read and I think that it flowed well. *5/5*

Alyson

I really liked this. I liked how you used the animals to relate to your life. my favorite was the race horse and the clouds. 5/5

This is a really really good poem. i'm pretty sure that a lot of people don't understand it but if you read it carefully its undersetandable... anyways i like it and keep it up...

(thanks for the comment)

Great job. I liked your comparisons. The first stanza had good flow...but sounded a little cheesy on the baby part. The rest of the poem was nice, but the last lines disrupted the flow. Keep it up! Don't let those downvoters bring you down. (I've had scores of them to deal with) They'll get tired of it soon.

Great job, loved it, 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

Aww. That was a wonderful job. I loved the emotion! Good luck with everything you do!

Great flow and i think this is nice and very fabulous

I liked your wording in th is poem. But I couldn't help but notice the fact that all your verses have a different number of lines. Somehow, though, it didn't affect the fact that it sounded wonderful.

5/5

Oh this is good, reminds me of wild horses by Natasha Bedingfield... good job

This one was great. *5/5*

Alyson

I thought that it was great. *5/5

Alyson

I thought that it was great. *5/5

Alyson

This is great.

i read somewhere on the board that you love reading poems. why don't you swing by my site.

i gave you a 5. it was well written.

David

Always wanted to tell you that your work is really unique!!! keep writing i am looking foward to it!!!

"I run hard like a race horse.
But I don't get anywhere fast.
Sometimes I feel,
as slow as a snail.
So time flies by,
on the wings of a bird,
And slowly leaves me behind."
^ That stanza made the entire poem the best poem I've ever read. I LOVED IT.

keep it up.
i've only done twenty, i will finish the rest tomorrow. I need sleep, i'm leaving tomorrow night for a trip. but, i'll get the other 16 done before i leave. promise.

Good job onthis, there's nice imagery! but the flow was a little off and i was a little confused about the rhyming... some of it rhymed and some off it didn't, i don't know if that was an accident or not, but im just pointing it out...

4/5