I think this one is my favourite that i have read so far. I like the mature tone in this one. You have managed to rhyme very well without being cliche. Really well done.

You're writing is so mesmerizing. i think i'm definitely adding you to my favorites!

Awesome! That's pretty much all I can think of. Man, I really hate love poems right now, but this one at least managed to make me smile.

I loved this poem. The vocab you chose was amazing. And the emotion entwined throughout this piece is beautiful as well as the the flow. 5/5

marcella

Hey I like this poem really good
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Friend: That was really passionate, I love your imagination. You (or the character) must have really loved a girl, but never got her. Nice work!

Me: Nice job. I agree with my friend. It's hard to find good guy poets because they always write about death or thinking of suicide...all that. Anyway, that was good. Keep on writing!!

Oh wow.. haha i start off all your comments with WOW but thats seriously what I say everytime I finish reading them. They are all so amazing and I really LOVE the ending of this poem.. I just love the way you take these topics and write about them in such a simple brilliant way. 5/5 for sure.

WOW, that was such a great poem, there was so much emotion but it was just great, i am ususally not really into poems like these, but WOW, it was just to amazing

This is such a sad poem. I loved the way that it flowed. *5/5*

Alyson

Reminds me of my ex lol very good you are very talented i whish i could write like that

The imagery was amazing, i am speechless, this blew me away.
I love your work
best wishes,
Tara-Kay
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It was a good read. The flow was very nice and this poem was easy to read and understand. I gave it a 5/5.

-tear- amazing poem. i loved it! it was very well written! =] 5/5

`-jackie.

Very good vocabulary
it rocked my sox off lol
great job!
I really enjoyed it
5/5

Awww. thats really good. i really like it. deff 5/5!

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Wow. This poem is probably the best one I've read in the past week. The imagery is amazing. As your profile states, you definitely do have skills.

5/5.

When I saw the title I knew I had to read this, I had no idea what the poem was about all I knew was that I wanted to know what it was about. This poem was really great. It put a whole new spin on relationships and dating a girl. The emotion which was portrayed to me seems somewhat deep holding amazing emotion which I found you to portrayed with such shine. Karl, You are truely talented. Well done with this nicely written love poem with a twist.~mel

Understandable i can really relate and there are many ppl that can relate as well great job very creative
laura

Awesome wording love the abab format keep up the good work
5/5

I really liked this piece. Really conveyed emotion . Keep up the good work. If you could, check out some of my work. I think you would really like it. Thank you and nice job.