Wow. in the beginning this poem kind of scared me, but after i read that she cheated on you. woah! total shock. the ending was great as well. 5/5

Good poem. I liked it. I think that maybe you should shorten all of the sentences. Because the langth of them might turn people away befor they even try to read it. It almost turned me away. 4/5

Almost flawless rhythm/flow. Very nice piece. Best wishes, and blessed be. 5/5

Good poem! I liked the flow alot keep up the good write!

Great choices of words i love the story from the start to the end i was enjoy reading it is quitley interesting and not boring,, great job!5/5

I thought that it was well organize and flowed well. It was lovely to read and the message was ok......Keep up the good work. *5/5*

Alyson

WOW, powerful ending. Awsume job:)

Oh wow. This is an amazing poem Darien. I loved it. Your flow was beautiful and it went smoothly. Never once did I get bored, or confused. This was wonderful, and sad. I love it.

Oh man i love reading ur poems. there always written so good!! i thought u did a great job. very touching piece. xx

This is a very good poem, 5/5

I've already commented on this poem, but I just wanted to let you know that this one is definately my favorite of yours!

Now this one is amazing. I loved how you got everything put together. Just speechless though. Great write.~Keep up the great writing. 5/5

Wow that was a very unique way to put a break up... normaly poems like these are just going on and on about how broken their heart is.....Your's tells a very different tale...I loved it and it was so unique and discriptive! The ending was PERFECT.

Moisture seeped through pores over your brow
^^ I think this would sound better if you said "Moisture seeped from the pores above your brow"

AWESOME write... I loved it 5/5

Your stories change quick like old folk tales
^^ohh very good discription