I like the idea, and the concept, and I like how you conveyed it. I think that, however, you could elaborate on the base you have here and really turn this into something amazing. Simply concentrate the emotion in this piece, the poem is the door to the writer's heart and soul. Let what you feel flow out through your words. Best wishes, and blessed be. *5/5

Wow. There are so many different emotions that you have in this poem. I felt a lot of resentment and bottled up frustration. I sensed a little bit of hurt and apologies as well. It wasn't very long, but what you portrayed in it was amazing. 5/5

Is a great poem, as for the last verse try somthing like this:

Save me from the fire,
I don't want to see another bridge burn.
I know I need to stop,
Its best for all conserened.

Mind you I can't spell, I hope it helps.

I really like this one. I really understand what you are saying... I am enjoying your writing a lot. I think the last stanza, perhaps just use alternate descriptions for fight, in anycase, its great,

This is great. i don't know what to say for the 4th. sorry....maybe something about how they teach us not to play with matches when we're kids?