by SherryAmpz Dec 14, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
love is
Love: The one you love is just like a bird. He will just land on your shoulder which means he likes you. Only you say, he is for you. |
Wow X) this poem is REALLY good. I like how you used a bird referring to love. Keep writing ;) excellent poem. |
by Sammib
Well this certainly is an interesting piece. What I felt about it is that it lacked emotion. Your feelings didn't leap at me. Although you can see you have a knack for writing, make sure it comes from your heart...it interests your reader more. You have good comparisons, and a good idea for structure, its unique. Alot of thought went into this poem, just not enough emotion.. use both and you will be an awesome poet!! |