by Bridget
Really good 5/5!! except there is one little thing i want to point out. You said you'd die of agony and despair and then a couples of lines later you said you'd eventually die crying from your tears. So i think you need 2 change one of the lines a bit so it doesn't say you'd die twice. If you see where I'm getting at.. otherwise excellent!! and i loved the idea of the key to your heart thing. |