It would be just just fine

Thats good...

I love this poem its so good

Another great poem..good job!

This is another great work of you that i really enjoyed, you are one of the great writers, keep up the great work like always, another 5/5 from me.

Pretty good, I really think you should have wrapped it up at the end though, Like .. Would it be okay if I tell you I loved you. Or something of the sort. You did a great job at rhyming, now you just need to work on the rhythm. I think these are your weakest lines:

Would it be okay if I love you and treat you with respect?
Would it be okay if I tell you you're perfect?

These are your strongest:

Would it be okay if I give you my heart?
Would it be okay if I cry if we ever part?

Great Rhyming Babe!

5/5

I think you should change the title to "Would it be Okay?". Simple but the flow was nice.

I really enjoyed reading this poem :]

I like this poem a lot.. the only critique i have is that.. the end isnt really final.. the questions are all random even though they rhyme.. i would try and work on another line with a question thats a little more final.. lol idk if your getting what im saying at all but i cant really explain it anymore than this.. lol

3.5

It seemed a bit jumbled. the rhythm was broken. But the words weren't all too bad.

thanks
- Em

3/5

Sorry but it was too repetitive. I ended up just skipping all the "Would it be okay"s. It was just too much. It is not appealing at all like that for the eyes. Try using the Would it be okay part on the first line and then either deleting all the others, or have different stanzas and having that in the first line of each stanza.

So brain tickling but it's emotional,keep up the good work