Comments : Love

  • 17 years ago

    by catherine

    There's a few spelling errors in there, just FIY. I liked it, and I could tell your feelings which is a good way to write. The only thing is that it didn't flow as well as it could.
    This stanza;
    i love him with all my heart
    i loved him when i first saw him right from the start
    I felt went from one line being too short to the next being too long. If you get my drift.