I really like this poem. The writing and rhyming just fit so well together. However in the last line I would change it from "..there won't be no more tears." to there will be no more tears. Just a thought.

Hiya hun! I hope that everything is going well. Just t let ya know, incase you didn't get my PM, you won the H/M in the contest in the club... I Still Love You... 3 poems for your prize. Let me know which ones! =]

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♥ Miss Ciao

This is written great, sad about the lost love but its still great...

Congrates mr.bryan for bringing another great poem to the site.
It was great. please keep up the great job like always.5/5 from me.

To me it sounds like you were trying to make this into a song, but I could be wrong. I liked the flow of it and the repitition was a nice touch. *5/5*

Alyson

Erm, just to let you know, the last stanza is a bit off.
You can only use the words you've used in the previous stanza to make up the last one in a paredelle.

"I must endure it, even if it means ill die"

You have a 'must' in there which isn't in any prevous stanza's.
The same for each last two lines, you can only use the words from the specific stanza.
But apart from that, you have a great concept and a strong message in this. It's very well thought out.
4/5
*Gem*

Comment #1:
Great job on this...I loved the phrase and title of blackened tears. It really adds darkness to something that already expresses sadness. Great job and congrats on 2nd place. You really did a wonderful job! :)
~Midnight Sun

Beautiful poem, really touching. i loved it 5/5

I really enjoyed reading this piece. I relate to alot of the feelings here. especially the part about surviving without the one you love. Excellent work>

This is sooooooo sad!!!!!! great job! 5/5

This is real good! i like it! thanx for the comments on my poems! keep up the good work

5/5. Such a sad but amazing poem. Such a great write. I think you earned a spot on my favorites!

I really liked this, I thought it was well written and a joy to read.
The wording and imagery used were excellent.

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Very deep, and the words fit perfectly.

---Ashley

Youre very talented... Keep up the good work...

RJ

Hey well this poem is really good. i really know what u feel...

I really liked this poem. It started out all sad and hopeless.. but in the end it gave it a hint of strength. You did an amazing job on this. You described everything so beautifully and worded it very well. My favorite stanza would have to be the 3rd stanza.. that one stuck out to me the most. Anyways.. Amazing job on this!

Your work is amazing ur on my fav list keep it up 5/5

This is a sad poem,but i love it bcos i cn relate to it.I understand completely wat its saying,en its quite wat i needed to hear,en reading it gave me a sense of strength,that my blackened tears wud clear out.Great work!