Wow. At first, when I saw the title, I was like 'Ugh. Another cliche topic.' But you handled it well. With such depth and emotion, you really did a great job.

The flow was very good for the most part. I mean, it wasn't perfect, but no one's perfect.

[With this final note, there wont be no more tears.]
^^I know that you used 'won't be no more tears' because it helps the flow. This is ingenius, but also a bad thing at the same time. It seems like you're trying to hard fr the rhyme scheme, instead of it just flowing from your head to the pen to the paper. But in another way, it says 'Well this guy knows how to write.' It just confused my thoughts about it.

The rhymes were ok. Not brilliant or anything. I know you could do better. Keep up the great writing. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Your writing style is exquisite. i love how everything just flowed and the rhythm was beautiful. 5/5

I love the lines, "Sometimes I'm wrong, but one thing is true,
Surviving is wrong, when its without you."

Great read.

I really loved the title of this. It really caught me. It flowed really well & was very beautiful. The wording & imagery.. EXCELLENT!

Amazing job. Keep it up.

Bri.x

That was a very good poem

I like this poem its really good!!

~megan~

Hey wow that was so great i loved the feeling inside it you are the best poet on here cause all your poems have alot of feeling and emotion to them all...great work!

"How long can my heart endure such pain,
Guilt and shame that will forever remain"

^^^
Maybe add a question mark somewhere in that as it is a question. That might be just me but i think it will work better like that.

"Trying to survive, but I don't know how long,
I can live without you, I'm trying to be strong,
Sometimes I'm wrong, but one thing is true,
Surviving is wrong, when its without you."

^^^
Yes I totally agree with that section. I can survive without the one I love, but that doesnt mean I ever want to contemplate being without them. well written.

"With this final note, my soul dies with fear,
My heart cries from its loss with blackened tears."

^^^
This line was awesome. Beautiful imagery, which I LOVE in a poem.

Wicked ending.
Love your poems.

Though you prolly know that already.
Keep it up

well done
^_^