Ok, so I'm a songwriter as well, and this was rather good for a first attempt. There is a few things I could suggest, and I know I'm going to sound very forward, but I am hoping it will help you write better lyrics.

First off, 2 verses and 2 chorus is not really a song. I think you should add another verse, or an interlude/bridge with different sets of lyrics.

Second, "Who am I and where I am"
That line for some odd reason, threw off the chrous. I guess it's because the line itself does not flow. The world 'and'. Also, you sort of changed the phrase from 'am i' to 'i am'. It should be left the same. I think would be better read 'Who am I, Where am I?' like that.

Lastly, "Youâ??re my true,
My true and saving grace."

You just need to edit that gibberish.

Aside from that, the lyrics are very creative and leave a wide variety of tunes that can fit this. You don't have to change a single thing, I just suggested something 'I' thought might help. Well done though.

I love it. Well done..

Amazing Job! I couldn't right lyrics if my life depended on it. I'll stick with poems. Great job. I love this part:

Sing back to me the angel's tune,
Of comfort, life, and hope,
For without your guidance to lead me on
I'm forever lost again,
A whisper will do what a shout can show
To a lost and confused girl,
So show me now what I'm to do
Don't leave me here alone.

Great job!

5/5

Thats realy good for a first atemp at writting a song, well done, enjoyed reading it!!!

Your first attempt?!
I thought this was amazing.
I loved it.

That was really good, especially for your first attempt. I find writing lyrics to be quite a challenge sometimes.

"A whisper will do what a shout can show
To a lost and confused girl,
So show me now what I'm to do
Don't leave me here alone."

This was my favourite part to it. The wording was just excellent, in my opinion.

Wow, this is another great write again.
you are doing so great, and keep it up. 5/5 from me like always.

This was a great song. and it was you're first? wow. you have talent! i really liked what it was about. you did a great job on it!

~Kristina

It's great