OMG! OMG OMG! Thats so fvckin good!
Nice flow! Nice rhyme + rhythm!
Overall LOVED IT!
Man your work gets better and better!
When eva i read it..im like blown away! great work huN!

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-*-Luv SUX!

Wow keenan, we were totally bright and chipper when we wrote this little peice, now weren't we? lol. very pretty, a little dark, but i must admit, i liked it. i like how instead of how i usually write where the 2nd and 4th lines in a stanza are the connected rhytmic words, you put it as te 1st and 3rd lines, it gives the poem a different kind of flow, i loved it. good job!
xo~Crissy