I loved this.
I thought the flow and rhyme scheme you used were really good.
A wonderful job.

You used some brilliant words here. Really nice flow as well, it painted such a sad picture
Well done
5/5
*Gem*

That was realli sad. I agree with the above comments 2. Keep up the good work!

Wow very strong, you can tell your in pain...hang in there...hey can you read my Cinderella poem and tell me what you think? great work!