Forsaken Father

by BeautifulxMess   Dec 18, 2006


Where did I go wrong?
What was it that I do?
All I did was love my father.
All I did was tell the truth.

Was it wrong to run away?
Was it bad to say all that?
How could you abandon me,
and still be behind my back?

Daddy please come home.
I'm lost without your voice.
You just held me down.
And I cried without no choice.

There's no denying I'm sad.
There's no lying that I'm broken.
When you'll know later on.
You're the one who is forsaken.

*Sorry it's kinda weired.
I just wrote this at the top of my head so yeah.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Getting Out of the Sea

    It is not weird. it is beautiful. I know u hav hard time w/ out ur father. I'm sry, but ur poem is deeply beautiful. I'm tellin u. ok I hav 2 go.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kayla Neece

    I like it. It reminds me of what I have been through. I like it alot!

  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    Very well written. Good job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Shae

    I agree with Joe...It should be "did" instead of "do"... Other than that good poem...Keep on writing!! =D 5/5

    ~Shae

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    It was very well written. The flow was ok as well as the strucutre.

    This line, "What was it that I do?" I Believe should be, "What was it that I did?" For "do" is present tense and "did" is past tense, so seeing how everything else was past I believe that line should be fixed. Other than that wonderful job. Keep it up!

    Peace, Joe

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