Comments : Cian, for your eyes only...

  • 17 years ago

    by emptysole

    Another good write but you need a bit of grammer in there and you should use the speel check eg:

    you give me flocking butterfly's,
    you make me feel so good,
    not a moment is spent with you,
    that i **dint** feel loved.

    your eyes are my heaven,
    your arms keep me safe and warm,
    you keep me safe from danger,
    fixed all that was **thorn.**

    you give me all your heart,
    and all your dearms too,
    but all i have in return,
    is endless love for you.

    you are my prince charming,
    your nice, never mean,
    you are my rainbow in the sky,
    and thats why i love you Cian.xxx

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    should be more like

    You give me flocking butterfly's,
    make me feel so good,
    not a moment spent with you,
    that i dont feel loved.

    Your eyes are my heaven,
    strong arms keep me safe and warm,
    also keep me safe from danger,
    fixed all that was thorn.

    You give me all your heart,
    and all your dearms too,
    but all i have in return,
    is endless love for you.

    You are my prince charming,
    never mean, always nice,
    my rainbow in the sky,
    and thats why i love you Cian.xxx
    now please dont be offened but i just cut out all the you you your your..
    and what i have writen is just an idea you dont have to change any thing if you are happy with it