Comments : Gone away

  • 17 years ago

    by simply crissyboo

    Great poem, but i would change one thing,

    "I'm not supposed to touch
    or get to close"

    i think i would change to,

    "I know i can't touch,
    and i can't get too close."

    but maybe not, that's just me i think it sounds fuller in a way. that's my advise. good poem though....4/5.
    love~Crissy