Very nicely penned poem. it flowed well even without consistant rhyme and had great language. i loved how you took this old story and made it your own. it was done very well.

problemos
He wrote there names...
In the stars for all to see...
i felt i wanted more. it just kind of seemed to cut off for me.
They both thought it was going to last,
They both thought it was never going to end.
i didnt like the repetitveness of this part.it just seemed like you were stuttering.

Overall GREAT job. you display much talent. =]

x3Lauren

ps you should join EOP