AWwwwww. That's sooo sad!
Very heartbroken poem!
Wow. Just amazing.
Keep up the great work!
God Bless 5/5

~*tay*~

That was BRILLIANT. Straight from the heart and so meaningful. Excellent work.

"All I do it seems is cry" -- this line here I think would read better if more punctuation was put into it: "All I do, it seems, is cry."

Anyhow, 5/5.

Great job,
this is one of the deepest one i have read, too many emotions hidden withen your words.
nicely done.
you really deserve a 5/5.

Wow. I'm like about to tear. GREAT JOB!

Very sad, emotional, and deep poem. Kept me reading throughout and also enjoying the poem throughout as well. Very nicely written. Good job. Easily 5/5.

Awwwwww, I wish I was dead. Cool poem by the way!

I cant describe the greatness of this poem, i mean every word was enchanting, i had to read it twice, it flows great and is perhaps on of my favorites, this is like a shortstory that rhymes, i found one mistake on the 5th of december make the 2nd sentence say (all i seem to do is cry). absolutely a masterpeice.

Amazingly brilliant! Very, Very powerful! Emotion, sadness, depression, I could feel it all as I read this poem! You really brought the reader inside a world full of dread and gloom! I'm just blown away... ok **Breaths** I shall try to say something critiques, but nothing to horrid because it really was a good poem!
Near the end at this part

“I wish I'd had some clue
To how you really felt”

I think you meant

“To know how you really felt”

Other than that it was very well written. I think if you would have added more commas and periods it would have developed a better rhythm and of course told the reader when the sentence was over. I really enjoyed the flow of the poem, and I wouldn’t want you to change a thing, but I think for future thought, try pushing it farther, like using stronger words to show how you feel, I think that would take the reader even farther into the world you want to show them, and make the poem even more in depth, you can say a lot with just one strong word, when it takes an entire sentence with some small words. Other than these things, I think it was an amazing poem and I’m honestly blown away by it! It was very strong! Keep up the great work! =D

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~*+Megan+*~

Omg is that real? seriously i had tears in my eyes... if that's true, i'm so sry for your pain, i can't even begin to imagine what you've dealt with, but that was an exceptionally good poem 5/5

I really like this. You managed to put a lengthly, emotional story into a great peom .I just hope it isn't true. It is a really great peom and it made me think. It means a lot to me, since my uncle also did that. Keep writing. I love it

Woah this poem is so sad...i have tears in my eyes...its so beautifully written and flows with such emotion! its perfect 5/5
Luv FallenxFromxGrace

This was one of the best poems i've ever read. a definite 5/5. Amazing job

Awwwwww omg! this is so sad..i was almost in tears.. i love it ur an excellent writer.

Ah. Utterly amazing. Your rhyming and flow to the poem was very nice. I usually don't like longer poems but I didn't want this one to end! It seems like a classic story of what happens in suicide.

You really poured your heart into that write. It is done very well. The story it tells happens alot more than people realalize. Some are so good at masking there pain. We do not realize till it is to late. Excellent work.

You really poured your heart into that write. It is done very well. The story it tells happens alot more than people realalize. Some are so good at masking there pain. We do not realize till it is to late. Excellent work.

Oh my goodness, this is a beautiful poem, I am in tears. I can feel the moms pain and dispair as shes lost her hurting child... wow... great write !! If the saying goes, we never know what we have until its gone. In reverse, you never know what you have until you live long enough to experience it.

Wow. this poem is so heartfelt. after i read it i got chills on my arms. amazing work of poetry! everything flowed well and it told a beautiful yet tragic story.

5/5

Very long. but the story it tells is so sad. sometimes no one knows how much pain you are in.

5/5. the ending is so beautiful.

David

Well....what else can i say but what everyone else has already said? this poem is just amazing. it flows really well and the emotion is there...looking back it was kinda long, but while you're reading it you get so wrapped up in it you don't even notice...or at least i didn't. but length doesn't really matter when it's a poem as good as this!! excellent work, keep it up!! ..::PEACE::..