Wilted

by Lauren Waszkiewicz   Dec 20, 2006


Wilting
The Flower Dies
Silently
The Petals Fall

She's been broken.
She's been Torn into two.

Once, the flower grew
Shades of every color-
Swirling within the petals.

Her soul blossomed,
She Was Alive.

Then the rain, the storm Rose
Her delicate petals could never withstand
The pouring rain, the hail, then the fire.

She's broken down
Because of him.

He tormented, abandoned,
Left her out in the cold.
First he lied to her.
Said he'd never hurt her.

Then he pushed her,
on that Cold December night,
Took it too far.

Then she crumbled..
Because of him she crumbled.

And now the flower's wilted.
No longer a beauty.
The colors have now faded.
She's gone.

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  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Wow. This one still amazes me.. Lol. I've read it so many times. I'm really glad you entered this into my contest. I enjoyed it very much. This is deffinitley another one of my favorites from you. Absolutley perfect.

    My favorite lines were:

    Then he pushed her,
    on that Cold December night,
    Took it too far.

    Then she crumbled..
    Because of him she crumbled.

    And now the flower's wilted.
    No longer a beauty.
    The colors have now faded.
    She's gone.

    ^^ AMAZING! They were reallly good! I can relate to this.. Perfectly written. Keep it up, Hun.

    Bri.x 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Trully a sad write. Felt the emotional pull of each word... each stanza.

    Word choice was good and the flow was well executed.

    Overall, good job.

    Jeannie

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    The temptation to tear.

    That was deep and reallllllllllllyyyy gooodddd. 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan Raff

    So many sad poems ;_:. But, once again, another good one. Keep up the good work - sad or not :).

  • 17 years ago

    by Laybelled with a name

    That is AMAZINGLY GOOD!!! It's one of the best poems I've read in a very long time, I love it!!!!! oxoxoxoxoxoxo

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