Unspoken

by BeautifulxMess   Dec 20, 2006


These words I speak are left unsaid
My heart was torn on this big bed.
You come in my life before it ended
You saved me; my heart's mended
You captured every living moment.
You gave me loved and proved it.
When I had doubt of flying above.
You told me that it's me you love.

Happiness crosses this bright face.
You help me stay in my little place.
Heavens not too far until I see you.
The gates open up and it's all true.
Then I see a bright light so gold.
And I'm open to a love I can hold.
When I'm alone in my room.
I dream that you'd be here too.

My heart doesn't make a sound.
It don't beat when your not around.
My world doesn't spine nor rotate.
When you leave it puts me in fate.
All night long it drives me crazy.
Because you're not with your baby.
Dream, but then I'm woken.
In my dreams words are unspoken.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    This poem is really well written and the flow is great also, nobody makes us feel the way the ones we love do, its very special great job 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I enjoyed this.
    I thought the last two lines were really good, really effective and powerful.
    I thought the flow was shaky in a couple of places but apart from that you did a wonderful job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    "Dream, but then I'm woken.
    In my dreams words are unspoken."

    I thought this poem was simply beautiful.
    The last line was magical.. the rhythm just flowed like fluid.
    You're very talented and you were on my faves too =)
    Well done
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    AHH
    2nd line- big!! BIG !! 3 letter word=a nono!!!!!! poetry 101!!!

    sorry that annoyed me
    moment-proved it -not rhyme

    Overall not bad. the rhythm kind of annoyed me. and the rhymes were someone cliche. or just not working.

    theme- understandable & relatable.

    flow- it flowed pretty well. some spots it could have been better

    but i didnt, im sorry to say, care for this poem that much.
    =[

    x3 Lauren

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