Very interesting, the structure && flow wasnt too good but the story behind it was great, & i could relate to it... keep up the work

Work a bit on the flow of your poem and the structure of the sentences, but the meaning behind the poem was good. Nice job.

You and I have plenty in common. Check out my poems when you get the chance.

You know what? i'm gonna laught hysterically now, and then slowly my laughter will turn into hysteric cries, because this is more than just real to me, so, my advice, kick her @$$ girl, now, when its not to late, because, a few years into the future ur gonna wish you did! trust me on this one!
oh, and excellent poem!

Narc xxx