Outside of being on the outside

by elliianna   Dec 21, 2006


I'm always on the out side looking in
And I think you are really my friend
And
You really care
Out of the blue, you have some reason to be mad at me
Its so stupid
But
That acts not the stupidest part
The dumbest part is
I always take you back
I dont always want to
But I do
Thats the stupidest part
With that I was always on the outside
And all I want is on the inside looking out

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  • 17 years ago

    by Behind Blue Eyes

    The last two lines as still a little iffy... go back and reread them...you repeated words and are missing some too.

    make sure to read over the rest of it to make sure you didnt miss any words and see if the flow reads the right way

  • 17 years ago

    by Behind Blue Eyes

    This is a good start...but i have a few suggestions..

    for one, you should go back and get rid of the weird symbols that show...it makes it hard to read. [they appear in place of the punctuation you used if you copy/paste from a word processor or something]

    and two, you should look for spelling and grammar errors... there are a few..

    other wise, i like the poem! i relate to it well...keep it up!

    <3

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