This is a good start...but i have a few suggestions..

for one, you should go back and get rid of the weird symbols that show...it makes it hard to read. [they appear in place of the punctuation you used if you copy/paste from a word processor or something]

and two, you should look for spelling and grammar errors... there are a few..

other wise, i like the poem! i relate to it well...keep it up!

<3

The last two lines as still a little iffy... go back and reread them...you repeated words and are missing some too.

make sure to read over the rest of it to make sure you didnt miss any words and see if the flow reads the right way