Lol. nice poem! loved it...although i wudnt hav gotten the message unless u told me tho so u mite wanna try n make that a bit clearer..

I'm not sure why I didn't like it. I really wanted to. I hate saying bad things about people's work, but I feel that no one on this site really tells the truth. Anyway, I think you should have made the lines a little longer. I think the structure was a little uneven, and I think the wording needed a little more strength and depth. Once again, I'm sorry for this comment.

Brad

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