The emotion in this poem really touched me. Word choice had a great variety and i was really impressed.i figured i'd go ahead and point out you have where instead of we're in the 15th line. Flow was okay, could be a lil improved in the 2nd stanza. i also noticed some of the stanzas don't ryme.it still works though except i think it's important that you're last stanza rymes but thats just a thought. 4/5 lots of love, kayla

Im so jealous!! i love this poen with a passion! ur really good! 5/5!

*Shawte*

I LOVE your poem! i really like!!!!!!!!! sorry, but it's really amazing to me! 5/5 without a doubt. check my poems out too, they're the same style as this one!

Wow i loved da emotion! it was so nice! keep up da great work! 5/5