Sorry i can't comment constructively, i have a lot going on at the moment since my nan's passing. I want to thank you however for the lovely comment you left on the poem about her.
I read through this poem and the way i was reading, i interpreted quite a powerful message between the lines.

"From your promiscuous eyes,
Can you see the storm getting closer?"

I especially loved the opening.
5/5
*Gem*

Once again I applaud your wonderful skills. I thank you also once again for the comments. haha...doubt I could impress you. Thanks always!
99 billion/5

~*Katie*~

Perfect! I loved it! And I totally agree with Gem! Beautiful opening!
xoxo