I love the wording and the structure. good job

THAT WAS THE BEST ONE! except srry i have this problem with the second line change it to: but i don't know why, it sounds a lot better, try it! now i have commented all ur poems how about you commont some of mine? well i will talk to you soon i know i will! i hope ceramics was not boring without me, i got to sleep in till 9:30 it was nice, well talk to ya soon....toodles
-say goodbye and go