Mountains(rewriten)

I liked this poem ,and I love the words you used, vey descriptive. Keep up the good work

"Like a King high up on his thrown," should be "Are like a king high up on his thrown"

"weightiness" should be "witnessed"..

wow besides those I really loved this poem it was very originaly and something that I hardly ever see.. the only critique I have is that it doesnt sound like the poem is finished I think that you need one more stanza to wrap the poem together and it could be amazing. beautiful job.

I told you! You're a nature kinda poet. I loved this, the other one was a bit better, because of the flow.. And size of stanzas, I think. BUt, this one was great. Keep it up. :D

Beautiful. I always like nature poems.
This one was wonderful. Well done!
Keep up the great work.
God bless 5/5
<3Tay^__^ily

Like the material. Mountains have enormous significance and symbolism in many different areas. Unfortunately, Grammar, wording, and typos severely detract from the overall quality of the poem.

line2. 'below' is repetitive. If mountains are above, everyone knows they are below. However, if the idea was to emphasize the diminished importance of the plains against the grandeur of the mtns, than try using another word to accomplish this.

line3. 'high' - repetition.
'up on' - awkward. Don't need 'up', just cut it out. '/high/ on his thrown'

line5. grammar - get rid of the comma. No need for it after the clause

line6. typo - 'there' should be 'their'

line7. typo? - 'weightiness'? If that's the write word it's very awkward and disrupts the flow. Should it be 'witness'?

line9. grammar- remove comma at end of line - obstructs flow

line10. typo - 'there' should be 'their'
line11. 'their' - repetition. Find another descriptor to identify the mountains so it sounds less... bland

line 12. typo? - 'dear' should be 'dare'?
typo - 'there' should be 'their'

This poem can improve dramatically with revision. Keep it up!