Dead words

Jeez. that poem just made me wana break down and cry, cos in a way i think i know how you were feeling when you wrote that. that poem was so strong, it would leave any1 who read it speechless 4 a minute. because when i read it i just felt the rejection in it and it made me remember how i actually feel sometimes. and i know for a fact that would make people who are cared for all the time feel lonely after reading that because it is so strong. i love how you repeated the first verse at the end but added the 'now'. that is what i call a good, strong, meaningful ending. well done 5/5 :)

* it's great this one.. it speaks with so much feeling, I believe it is an intense poem.. :) great job..

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Really good work. I definitely understand and can relate to this a lot. Keep up the good work.

This is a real good poem, with lots of emotion, i get the impression that you feel weak, but you always so only strenght? well done

Narc xxx

Excellent =) I loved it! The only things I thought I should point out are:

"Im just *you* (your) fall back girl"
-just a simple typo =P

and..

"But you always know just what to say
To make me feel at ease
You always know just what to say
*So that I don’t leave* (So that I do not leave) "
-I think that makes the flow a little better..

Well, that's it! Overall, it's excellent!
5/5